1 star
Reviewed by Dawn
I like the story. It was unique, even though the love-at-first-sight, alpha male taking everything over, thing was a bit over the top. And that's not where the criticism stops. There is no way that those women would have lasted in a daycare program without complaints getting them fired long before they were. The pet names and slobbery phrases were truly annoying. I pride myself on not giving bad reviews for grammatical errors and typos, but I just can't get past them. Even if you don't have a decent editor, BETA and ARC reads are meant to catch the things that don't fit or any mistakes left behind. There were notes left in the book that should have been removed. The name of the book headed each chapter. Confusing determiners and contractions with each other is one of my biggest pet peeves. So many of the quotes sounded like gang speak. There wasn't once that the word "woman" was used in the singular. As a copy editor, I could see the potential for a good story there, but I could not get past how terribly it was written. This entire story needs to be rewritten.
Late Night Books Reviewer Dawn
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